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Post by Jenna Fanboy on May 20, 2012 12:32:21 GMT -5
Here's a preview of what I'm planning. If it's positive, I will continue:
Po and Tigress were more heartbroken than they had ever been in their entire lives. Their two twin daughters, Mei-Lin the white tigress and Huan Ning the panda, only five years old, had contracted the lethal and dreaded disease of Diphtheria, just like many of the other children in Nome. Sadly, they looked at them as they laid in their bed at the hospital. Near them, Jenna looked equally concerned for her young owners. Huan looked at the red husky and then at her parents.
"What's going to happen to us?" the little panda asked, her voice raw and pained from all her coughing
Tigress held her, as it could be the last time she did so.
"We're hoping that the dog teams get back soon. They'll have the medicine and you two will be cured," she said, trying to hold back her tears.
Po placed a comforting hand on her shoulder, and Jenna nuzzled her comfortingly. Mei and Huan began another coughing fit. Tigress could not stand it any longer. She buried her face in Po's shoulder and began to weep. Po held her. Meanwhile, Balto was out there, trying to find Steele and his team.
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Post by ™★Steele★™ on May 20, 2012 13:02:25 GMT -5
Nice work
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Post by Jenna Fanboy on May 20, 2012 13:04:56 GMT -5
Anything I could fix or change?
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Post by ™★Steele★™ on May 20, 2012 13:29:14 GMT -5
No it look good to me.
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Post by Jenna Fanboy on May 20, 2012 14:01:59 GMT -5
Ok. Good. I hope I did a good job getting the impact of the disease across.
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Post by ™★Steele★™ on May 20, 2012 14:17:47 GMT -5
Yea you did good.
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Post by tipofanforlife on May 20, 2012 22:16:17 GMT -5
Awesomeness my friend It's sure is sad to see Po an dTigress going through such a horrible thing to have to watch their children in such a state and having such a bad disease Cant wait for the full version my friend
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Post by Jenna Fanboy on May 20, 2012 22:18:29 GMT -5
Awesomeness my friend It's sure is sad to see Po an dTigress going through such a horrible thing to have to watch their children in such a state and having such a bad disease Cant wait for the full version my friend Thanks, though this probably won't come for a bit, as I have some other stuff I want to do first. However, don't worry, Balto will come with the medicine and Po and Tigress will adopt him.
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